What a clever and endearing way to unfold this, to pull me in. To bridge half a century with a few stepping stones, removing the layers and bringing it right up close....really enjoyed it!
This is such a beautiful story Amanda. I remember seeing the prompt when it came in. I couldn't imagine how one my turn it into a story about transformation because it was so spare and there was no dramatic event. It was quiet and subtle. You managed to keep that pensive, reflective tone that I'm sure whoever wrote it will appreciate while also giving the narrator a struggle and depth that is critical to make the story come to life. Bravo!
*phew* THANK YOU for that - I loved the quietness and reflection of the prompt so much, but that was also a big factor in why I had to rewrite it so many times and was doing so right up until the deadline. I hope whoever submitted the prompt for this story feels that I did the essence of it justice - my biggest worry was (and still is) taking too much liberty. But I just kept asking myself “why would a child want to spend so much time at a zoo instead of going home after school?” and I just followed those crumbs.
What a beautiful portrait of yearning and empathy. The turn at the end where she suddenly understands the animals are in captivity is so powerful. I gasped. I love that she had mentors who saw her talent and encouraged her.
Thank you so much! That juxtaposition of the freedom she was finding compared to the animals’ captivity was the most intriguing part of the prompt too, when I received it. I was hoping I could communicate that effectively.
I very much liked the juxtaposition of the diary, mind diary, and diary to my younger self. I think it is an effective way of getting inside a character. I've not seen that before. Smart.
So much self-discovery, so beautifully told. As someone who abhors zoos and marine parks, the conclusion gave me so much joy. We all long to be free.
What a clever and endearing way to unfold this, to pull me in. To bridge half a century with a few stepping stones, removing the layers and bringing it right up close....really enjoyed it!
Subtle and sublime. Such a good framework to write this story.
This is such a beautiful story Amanda. I remember seeing the prompt when it came in. I couldn't imagine how one my turn it into a story about transformation because it was so spare and there was no dramatic event. It was quiet and subtle. You managed to keep that pensive, reflective tone that I'm sure whoever wrote it will appreciate while also giving the narrator a struggle and depth that is critical to make the story come to life. Bravo!
*phew* THANK YOU for that - I loved the quietness and reflection of the prompt so much, but that was also a big factor in why I had to rewrite it so many times and was doing so right up until the deadline. I hope whoever submitted the prompt for this story feels that I did the essence of it justice - my biggest worry was (and still is) taking too much liberty. But I just kept asking myself “why would a child want to spend so much time at a zoo instead of going home after school?” and I just followed those crumbs.
"felt so natural, full, and vibrant"...yes it did, all of it truly did
Thank you kindly ❤️
Lovely, just lovely 💚
Thank you!
What a beautiful portrait of yearning and empathy. The turn at the end where she suddenly understands the animals are in captivity is so powerful. I gasped. I love that she had mentors who saw her talent and encouraged her.
Thank you so much! That juxtaposition of the freedom she was finding compared to the animals’ captivity was the most intriguing part of the prompt too, when I received it. I was hoping I could communicate that effectively.
I very much liked the juxtaposition of the diary, mind diary, and diary to my younger self. I think it is an effective way of getting inside a character. I've not seen that before. Smart.
Thank you! It took about 5 iterations for me to get to that point and several rewrites but I’m pretty happy that I landed there!
How wonderful, you really do have all the talent!
You are too kind!
Not at all, just saying what we are all thinking. ☺️
So beautifully written! You really brought me into the mind and experience of that girl in 1976.
Thank you so much!